Ninth Palaver

Well thank you all the same.

and yeah, its nice to have some kind of relationship with him. and hes pretty appreciative of my drawings which is nice.

Does he do Youtubing Full-Time? Or just for fun?

I think he's still in school, so its still part time for him, but he's in summer.

Well that's good. Hopefully he hits it big on day.

Yeah, though he seemed to not want to do stuff for a while, but he's back at least which is good.

So I'm only about 3 pages into your chapter, but i like it so far.

Thanks dude - worked hard on it. Still want to add a few things though, but I can always do that later.

Sorry for the late reply - on the road. I've read about ten pages so far of yours... Great as always; you haven't lost a beat.

Yeah you're being too kind. but thank you.

Adn eah, I like it, I just had one small thing, if that's oka. im open to any criticisms you have in fairness.

Shoot.

If it has to do with Grammar or Spelling, I know some of it is pretty bad. I'll fix that later. If it's something else, I too and open to some criticism/thoughts.

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Its something else, I'm also onto the sixth page now where the song is going viral.

Its mostly when characters talk, I believe they should start new paragraphs, so you dont lose who's talking.

and I just want ot be careful with criticism. I accidentally criticized a friends writing without meaning to and she didn't really take it well. So in fairness, anyhting at all youre noticing with mine? outside of spelling and grammar as well?

Oh... The character dialogue... That's a relief... XD

I thought it was going to be something huge... XD XD XD

Yeah, I'm going to fix that too when I go over it again. Don't know why, but I always write like that in my rough drafts. Probably because I don't like to waste the paper I'm writing on.

As for your stuff, it's just a few grammar/spelling errors, nothing too big. I love the flow of it so far, and you've always done a good job of character development. I know you said you're open to criticism, but I just don't have any (at least as of yet).

Oh, and I should be done with about half of it by the time I get home tomorrow. Wanted to read more yesterday, but the whole funeral service and slight family reunion took like all day long since there was literally tons of sorrow being drowned in alcohol.

Its oka, no worries. And yeah, just the dialogue really.

and thanks for the words of encouragement. I'm glad you're enjoying the characters since like I said, its a character driven story really.

Good.

You've always been good at that, if I remember your Gemstone Order stories correctly.

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Well, something I believe in is a developed character. Hopefully nes that aren't stereotypical.

I here you on that. Helps make for a great story.

Yeah I have to think strong characters would be. XD

XD

So how have you been doing lately?

I've been doing well actually. Mostly relaxing really.

How have you been? Finally bacck home?

Nice.

Yeah, got back a few days ago. I'm mainly relaxing too, don't go back to work until Monday.

Ah, I always love having extended readings. Did everything go well?

Yeah, it was good. It was WAY Humid and pretty Windy, but besides that, it was nice.

All these Ads are killing me. XD