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Wow. That's really impressive! I look forward to reading the whole thing!

What can I say? I'm an over achiever. When my teacher actually read the whole thing, she knew why it was so long. THough at the time, I thought it was because I have an overactive imagination. She told me I breathe life into the character and make it seem like you're there. She said I had the makings of a professional Author and that made me get red in the face. Modesty and all. Thanks to the bonus points she gave me for writing that story, I passed that class with a 103% instead of 100%. That was early nineth grade so, I made a good impression in the English department when my teacher told the others.

That's really cool! I almost got through acting 1 with more than a 100%. It came really close. I'm a kinda over achiever as well. The difference with me is that it's once I get started on something it's hard for me to stop unless it's perfect. I make monster PowerPoints because of that.

Nothing wrong with wanting perfection Sir Seth. I'm going to be off for awhile and type my other story. I'll be back for our Daily late night palaver, and I'll let you know when I put my story on Quizilla.

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Sir Anthony I was reading your story again because I love it so much, and I realized why I liked it so much. Great storyline, but most of all the chracter's names. Also I'm great at Math and storys/poems/reading in school. I might have just finished 7th grade but in math I am mostly doing High school work. But I love literature. Also congrats Sir Seth on getting to be top trainer.

-Warrior13

P.S. Great starting team Sir Anthony.

P.S.S. New Riddle:

I am the beginning of sorrow,

and the end of sickness.

You cannot express happiness without me,

yet I am in the midst of crosses.

I am always in risk,

yet never in danger.

You may find me in the sun,

but I am never out of darkness.


« Last edited by Warrior13 on 26th Jun 2008 »

Starlight? I'm glad you like it so much and thankyou about my team.

« Last edited by emeraldrafael on 26th Jun 2008 »

No problem, I can't wait till your done with the whole story. And no it's not starlight.

I'm putting the sequel up soon as I type it all up. YOu should chekc it once its done. I'll let you know. IT's gonna be in three parts though. Each as long as the other. Is it hope?

The letter s.

How do you get them all? Well then, here is a new riddle:

The paragraph below is most unusual. How quickly can you find out what is so unusual about it? It looks so ordinary you'd think nothing was wrong with it - and in fact, nothing is wrong with it. It is unusual though. Why?



"Gatsby was walking back from a visit down in Branton Hill's manufacturing district on a Saturday night. A busy day's traffic had had its noisy run; and with not many folks in sight, His Honour got along without having to stop to grasp a hand, or talk; for a mayor out of City Hall is a shining mark for any politician. And so, coming to Broadway, a booming bass drum and sounds of singing, told of a small Salvation Army unit carrying on amidst Broadway's night shopping crowds. Gatsby , walking towards that group, saw a youg girl, back toward him, just finishing a long, soulful oration ... "

The above passage is taken from the book "Gatsby" written by Ernest Vincent Wright in the late 1930's

shouldn't youg be "young"? Also I put up part of the sequel. if you wawnt to see it. go to the tags sections of quizilla and click stories.

It's called Retaliation pt. 1

« Last edited by emeraldrafael on 26th Jun 2008 »

I loved the story. Great job squeezing yourself in. So when does sir Seth and Sir Michael come in? Also got to go, brother's turn.

« Last edited by Warrior13 on 26th Jun 2008 »

Your not in this story. I had finished writing this one about a month ago. You come in the third part of this mini trilogy (Extermination), because that isn't done yet. Sorry but I can't change this one around because its already perfect (at leasst to me) as it is. Be patiant and your moment will come, Sir Michael. Besides, I knew the third part would use me as the main protanganist. after I wrote "The Passing of the Sword."

I think "youg" is just a typo. It was said that nothing was wrong with that paragraph, so you should pay it no mind. Hmm... This is fun! What's odd about that paragraph... This has lots of thinking in it! If I'm right, Warrior13, it's similar to the paragraph I just put up, isn't it?

Sir Seth, did you view the story? I'd love to know your opinion and if your disappointed that you or Sir Michael are not in it.

I'm having a problem finding exactly where it is...

*EDIT*

I like it! This has a lot more development of individual characters, and leaves you kinda hanging! The only problem was that there were a lot more grammatical errors in this one, and you also forgot words or letters here and there. Also, like with the last one, some expressions could be replaces to better fit the mood you're trying to portray at the time, and just to make more sense in context. Quotations need to have a lead in. With a few, it was a bit difficult to tell exactly who was taking. Sorry I'm so critical. Still, it has a great developing story! Another really fun read!

« Last edited by Seth Vilo on 26th Jun 2008 »

Of course it leaves you hanging. It's only part 1. sorry about the missing words. I write/type off the top of my head and my brain registers them, but doesn't send the signal to my hands. So I write the next word and think it is normal. I might get part two up by tonight, early tomorrow at latest. I'll have part three down by this time tomorrow I hope. It gets alot better, Assisnation attempt, battles, love interest made. I think you two will like it.

Oh yeah. I love it, just by hearing what you told me. Also no it is not the paragraph you posted. Remember it is a riddle, what should be there but isn't.

« Last edited by Warrior13 on 26th Jun 2008 »

Good, I won't get to all of it tomorrow, but I should get to the Assination attempt. Sorry again about you two not bing in this one.

No problem. You wrote this a mouth ago, I just can't wait till part 2 and 3.